NEA production pitch feedback

Ideas/ comments from my production pitch:

• To show the distance of their relationship through the boy being further away in physical distance in each shot. Shows the physical and emotional distance between them.
• Show the boy with someone at the end, it first appears to the audience he is with the girl but then shows he has moved on.
• Features him in every clip with her to show he was always there but didn't help- emphasises the theme of guilt.
• The use of putting clips together to make it look like someone breaks when they fall- a clip of someone falling changing to smashing plates.